Credo

[preserved_ginger]

Title: Credo
Rating: PG-13
Setting: At some unspecified point post-The Fires of Pompeii
Character(s): Ten. Rose (off-camera).
Pairing(s): Ten/Rose
A/N: Inspired by, but no spoilers for, 4X02 (The Fires of Pompeii). The title is Latin, from the Christian Nicene Creed, and translates as "I believe".
Summary: I dwell upon the words I'd never said

I cannot hold thee, for thou art not here;
Yet I'll not grieve thee, as thou art not dead.
But thoughts of thee reduce me, still, to tears;
I dwell upon the words I'd never said:
Thou always wert the apple of mine eye,
The one for whom my sun both rose and set,
And I can't fathom how it is that I
Had never told thee that I lov'd thee, yet
I think that I could never love thee more.
Believe me when I tell thee that mine hearts
Still belong both to thee, yet feel both sore
And sorrowful because we are apart;
And thou shouldst know that, though we bid adieu,
My mind, my soul, my body are still true.

Comments

[kitty-cate.livejournal.com]

astoundingly, unfairly beautiful.

that is INSANE.
how can you write a sonnet? i can hardly scrape together a rhyming poem, let alone follow the rules of the sonnet! (that's unfair, that is.)

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

This one was actually quite hard to write. I tried to write it in modern English (i.e. none of the "thee" and "thou" in it) but it just refused to work.

Switched to the archaic language and it just seemed to flow. Weird, or what?

[kitty-cate.livejournal.com]

it's still really great.
and that's mad! i can kinda get it, though...

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

I might try writing the next one (assuming there is a next one) in the archaic form first, as a writing exercise if nothing else.

The results could be interesting!

[brokentimelord.livejournal.com]

*sniff* that was just beautiful, fantastic

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

*sniff* that was just beautiful, fantastic

Thank you!

[arose4thedoctor.livejournal.com]

that was so beautiful. sad, but beautiful.

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

that was so beautiful. sad, but beautiful.

Thank you (I really, really like your icon, by the way. Poor Doctor.)

[maniacalshen.livejournal.com]

That's brilliant. :)

[amaya7.livejournal.com]

How beautiful and heartbreaking.

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

How beautiful and heartbreaking.

Thank you (I think). It's how I imagined he might have been feeling after that episode, or at the very least how he's been feeling since she's been gone.

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

That's brilliant. :)

Thanks!

[principia-coh.livejournal.com]

I'm still a bit meeved that they didn't give a TSR shout-out (the referenced way on back to The Romans instead), but this makes me feel much better!

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

I'm still a bit meeved that they didn't give a TSR shout-out (the referenced way on back to The Romans instead), but this makes me feel much better!

Ah, but to shout out for The Stone Rose would probably be too overtly shippy for them (although given that they're all onboard for the Doctor/Rose 'ship, it wouldn't have hurt).

Glad I made you feel better about it though!

[jai-23.livejournal.com]

And thou shouldst know that, though we bid adieu,
My mind, my soul, my body are still true.

You always end on the best rhyming couplets. :)

Truly and utterly beautiful. ♥

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

You always end on the best rhyming couplets. :)

Technically, I suspect that’s only a half-rhyme, but what the heck. It works ;D

Truly and utterly beautiful. ♥

Thank you!

re: Credo

[acciochocolate.livejournal.com]

I'm stunned by the beautiful and formal language. I have great admiration for those who can write in poetic forms like this.

Re: Credo

[bananasandroses.livejournal.com]

I'm stunned by the beautiful and formal language. I have great admiration for those who can write in poetic forms like this.

I tried writing this in normal language (i.e. without the archaic second person) but it wouldn’t work. As soon as I brought the “thee / thou” concept in it just flowed out.

I am glad you like this one; it’s one of my favourites.